Well, the second part of my message disappeared so, any way to continue. Gibberish to me is noise that comes back after you have provided a critique to someone. The rules of the game we were given was 1) never argue. The critiquer isn't interested, in general, to why you think they are wrong about your story. Here's some common things that can go wrong and how you might interpret them:
1) I can't relate to character x--they are so unbelievable or that would never happen:
Think about who gave you the comment. Is such a character likely in their experience? I was on jury duty during a time when my girl friend and I partied at some of the night clubs around Pioneer Square. The question came up whether or not a "non-hooker" girl would ever be about on 1st Avenue in Seattle at 10:00 pm on a Sunday. My experience said yes. Two-thirds of the jury responded that only hookers would be out. Result : hung jury. This happened several times.
How do you fix this problem?
Maybe you don't. Maybe these people aren't in your target audience. Or maybe your story needs to add more information. Sometimes the problem is your character hasn't provided enough physical and emotional responses.


